When writing a cover letter, we want to attract the recruiter's attention from the first sentence. Be careful not to overdo
In a letter, the first sentence can make the difference. Good or bad. To realize that it is important not to do, we have asked two recruitment specialists, William Blanchin, Robert Walters office, and Philippe Combes, of Hays, to tell us what they have seen worse in the matter. Anthology of the worst taglines from real letters of motivation.
1. The grip superhero
"Looking for a dynamic candidate, capable of evolving in an international environment.I am the man for you. "
"Looking for someone who will project your company in the coming years? I am the person for you. "
The reaction of employers: "Too much to sell, is to risk ridicule, warns William Blanchin. This is not necessarily insurmountable, but it is useless. These are not points earned. "
What to do: As in love, in professional seduction, there is the evidence that count. Do not say you're done for them, prove it by explaining throughout your letter that you have already participated in similar projects or that you understand their issues of development.
2. The grip Captain Obvious
"May I send you my application letter. "
"I am currently looking for a job. "
The reaction of employers: "Really? "Risk think ironically one that will play you. Start that way, it's almost saying "I'm writing you a letter." Of course, the recruiter had understood.
What to do: It is better to delete this reference and move on. Or say much more. For example, say you're in the active standby to find the job that perfectly matches a particular criterion.
3. The grip CV
"I have a very long experience, employment, missions and various positions. "
"With a Master 2 in specialist management of management in human resources ..."
The reaction of employers: "If the first sentence is a repetition of the resume is a waste of time, clearly 'installment Philippe Combes. A cover letter should be short: about 15 lines.
What to do: If you feel the need to clarify certain points of your route, for example, if you are converting, it makes more sense to do it subtly in the second paragraph, rather than scare the recruiter soon grip.
4. The grip "Fan"
"Your company wants to grow by controlling its financial and accounting flows. "
"You are a family business that promotes personal development. "
The reaction of employers: "corporate speak is good. Provide details of its financial health or its values, it's risky, "says Guillaume Blanchin. First, because it is often boat.Then, because we run the risk of not being up to date information, and therefore be completely off topic.
What to do: Avoid generalities and be absolutely certain. If the company really has a different project from competitors or original values, you can mention. But make sure the veracity of the facts by contacting one of its employees, for example.
5. The political grip
"Work on Sunday is debatable. Personally, I'm not afraid to come to the office on weekends and holidays because productivity does not wait. "
The reaction of employers: "The presentations 35 hours or the Minister of Economy, we see, even if it is very marginal, says Guillaume Blanchin. This is extremely dangerous. "
What to do: Keep his political opinions to yourself. These subjects are too cleaving to be mentioned in a letter or interview.
6. philosophical grip
"Entrepreneurship is to take risks and continuously expand his comfort zone to achieve its objectives. "
"" Believe in something and not live it, is dishonest, "Gandhi said. "
The reaction of employers: "It smells phrase pumped somewhere," says Philippe Combes, doubtfully. Coaches, outplacement consultants and trainers often give examples of sentences out as "Expand your comfort zone," and often, candidates show them unchanged. Result, they are overused and impersonal. Ditto for the literary quotation. Even in quotes, do not use it if you found it in a specialized dictionary. It says nothing about you.
What to do: The quote is not totally prohibited, provided that you actually speak and say why. And for the leitmotifs, Philippe Combes believes that "we can be inspired but by writing it in his own words. When we have the interview in person, the letter of personality you want to find, "he added.
7. The grip (too) close
"My wife is a pharmacist in Paris and my mother is domiciled rue d'Alesia. "
"After divorcing after an infidelity, I need to bounce back by taking everything from scratch. "
The reaction of employers: "And if not, the job, he's interested? "It's true, our search criteria for employment are often linked to our personal lives. But the recruiter does not need to know as much. Your love life, serious illness, or the complete history of your family, from the first sentence of a letter, it's embarrassing and it does not help you get an interview.
What to do: In some cases, your personal life deserves to be mentioned. If you are applying for a position at the other end of France, you can say that your life will take you to want to move, but avoiding to say too much and causing as a second criterion of motivation after job content.
8. The grip misspelling
"In response to your advertisement in the TV ..."
"Your company matches ..."
The reaction of employers: Oops. Eliminated. The style mistakes and spelling errors are unacceptable. No need to say more, though?
What to do: Re-read, to read. Re-read it again.
9. The grip of despair
"Are you going perhaps to read the tenth nomination day ... and without knowing you are also the most important person in my career. Indeed, you decide to put this letter to the basket or go to the end, which will bring you to grant me an interview. "
"Let me send you this letter, it has been eight years that I am in contact with institutions like yours to offer my collaboration. "
"I have no significant financial ambition. "
The reaction of employers: "To say that we are ready to accept everything, it's against-productive," says Philippe Combes. A job search is difficult for everyone, you will not leave the lot by writing it in black and white. Even if the recruiter has mercy on you, he will not hire you for this.
It is better to do: Do you plan to position you are applying rather than thinking about the situation where you are now. Tell your relatives to your difficulties keeping only positive for the recruiter. Courage.
10. The grip too-much
"I have the honor to hereby request your high benevolence, kindly grant me a job in your esteemed institution as you see fit with my skills. "
The reaction of employers: "It hangs because we talk about the years after," laughs Philippe Combes, who found the letter in 2006. But it is not enough to get an interview.
What to do: Do not try to make an impression in form, but from the bottom.
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